tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3039049849428602661.post5941878972346340238..comments2023-06-08T07:01:30.846-07:00Comments on Lorelei's Writing Journal: Drafty Drafts & Precarious SituationsLorelei Bellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03294047277447613989noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3039049849428602661.post-11394895786362177422012-01-11T10:12:19.686-08:002012-01-11T10:12:19.686-08:00Hi, Vivienne, yeah... I'll find a way to smoot...Hi, Vivienne, yeah... I'll find a way to smooth that passage out too. <br /><br />Thanks for your comments!Lorelei Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03294047277447613989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3039049849428602661.post-71531773662590904912012-01-11T08:53:41.225-08:002012-01-11T08:53:41.225-08:00Loving it so far. You are right about the snow but...Loving it so far. You are right about the snow but I don't have any ideas for you. I like how you changed "I felt Drachen's breath on my neck"<br />I like how smoothly it flows now.Vivienne Mosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521668500782189081noreply@blogger.com