At any rate, the picture of these two and what they say inside the bubble gave me the idea: Yes! These two would be perfect to add a little comic relief when I need it. Some different dynamics, and texture to the read. I always want to add someone new to the book. Of course later on, the book has Sabrina off on one of her adventures, and she goes back to Beyond Black Veil (Vampire Nocturne), and she visits a few old friends, makes new ones, and goes on to get into new situations which involve lots of interesting, dangerous, perilous situations.
As I mentioned on that post, I had put in two other characters at first. It was falling flat. Well, instead of trying to write these two in--Kaleb and Sebastian--I did a "find and replace" window. Replacing Sebastian for James and Kaleb for Dolores. I had to make sure where I had Dolores I've changed the "she" to "he", but for the most part the rewrite of this has been minimal, and enjoyable.
Here is a little excerpt from what I've got so far...
~from Six Shades of Hell by Lorelei Bell
As
it turned out I didn't have to go all the way into the kitchen.
Fifteen minutes later, when I opened the bathroom door, which opened
out into the dining room, there they both where. Two young men, who
were in their twenties, standing near the dining room table wearing a
black jackets over a dark vests and white shirt, white gloves and a
conservative ties. In looks they were similar build, and their
long-ish hair was styled in a disarray of locks. One was blond, the
other had black hair, bleached blond only on the top, and slightly
mussier, and the dark lengths in the front were much longer, hanging
way down over his eyes, but in trained tendrils. He wore black-rimmed
glasses.
They
beamed at me. “Good morning, mistress,” they said in stereo.
I
looked at the dining table, surprised to see a sterling silver coffee
urn—which I know I didn't own—and the other aromas, which came
from under a domed platter, and I could definitely detect eggs and
possibly bacon. Okay. So, maybe they could stay. They were cute, in
their own way.
I
twisted my mouth and looked back up at them. “Did Tremayne send for
you to come all the way out here?”
They
nodded, grinning. “He texted us,” the blond said.
“Oh,
introductions! This is Kaleb, with a 'K',” said the one wearing
glasses.
“And
he's Sebastian,” Kaleb said, holding out his hands toward the other
man.
“You
two are brothers?”
“Yes,”
they both said.
“You
used to work at the Tremayne Towers,” I said, squinting. “I'm
getting Letitia from you.”
“Oh,
she's good,” Kaleb said, sounding impressed.
“Tremayne
was right about her.” Sebastian agreed. His brother nodded.
“We
were Letitia's servants. Until her death, that is,” Kaleb said, and
looked down and away.
“There,
brother, it's okay,” Sebastian consoled his brother, patting him on
the shoulder. To me he said, “Kaleb was the one who found her in
her bedroom.”
I
nodded with his somber explanation, and at the same time I got the
image straight from Kaleb. He had walked in that next day, and found
Letitia on the floor, dead. She had been impaled in the heart by a
wooden bolt from murderer, Toby Hunt. The two contacted Tremayne
right away—who lived in a penthouse right across from her—and he
was the one who examined her. She had been Tremayne's life-time mate
for many centuries.
“I'm
sorry,” I said. Too many memories surfaced from this read. It was
how I came to be in Tremayne's employ from then on, as his “seer”,
and solved the murder, telling him nearly too late who it was. It
felt like years ago and it was only a few months ago. So much had
happened since then it made my head spin.
“Oh,
you needn't apologize,” Sebastian said, shaking his head to move
the separate long dark strands around. He reminded me a little of a
Shetland pony. A thin one. He had narrow shoulders, like his brother
(who was slightly taller), both were under six feet tall. Possibly
five eight and five seven.
“No.
I mean, I'm sorry for your loss. I can see you were very fond of her.
I imagine she was someone everyone loved,” I said.
“Hard
to believe it of a vampire, but yes. She was an easy mistress. Not
too terribly demanding,” Sebastian said.
“Plus
she gave us wonderful bonuses, and eight weeks vacation, whenever we
wanted it, and other things.”
“Don't
forget the wheels, Kaleb,” Sebastian reminded.
Kaleb's
eyes widened. “Really super wheels. It's a good thing we could
borrow the SUV, today, though, in order to get out here,” Kaleb
said.
Sebastian
nodded and turned to me. “Anyway, we hope we can serve you in your
time of need, mistress.”
I
smiled. “I've never had a broken anything.” Glancing down at my
leg, I still stood with the crutches under each arm. “And this is
really nice what you've set up here,” I said, nodding toward the
prepared table.
“I
hope you don't mind, but we took the bedroom with the twin beds,”
Sebastian said. “It reminds us of our boyhood.”
“No.
That's fine. If you need anything at all, or need something, just
ask. Sorry that my house isn't quite the luxury of a penthouse.”
“Oh,
it's charming,” Kaleb said, eyes glinting from under his blond
locks as he took in the room.“I especially like the envelope door
and French doors. Don't you, brother?”
“That
room I'll be busy rearranging the furniture in,” Sebastian said.
